Reading Parts Of My Book ( The Killer By The Railroad)

It's time to read a little Soni decided to read parts of chapter 1 of my book the killer by the railroad and it didn't get much appreciation or readers so I'm hoping I can get some feedback from anyone good or bad to help me improve my writing style. Thanks everyone as usual it's my plan pleasure to create episode on this podcast. Feedback on here, LinkedIn page vcreativeart16, Facebook page vcreativeart16, Vanessa:s Podcast, Twitter katiakendall29, YouTube book tutorial playlist superkendall30